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Corran
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On the Run
This is very sketchy and is basically just a concept so far and ive only spent about 15 minutes thinking it up and typing it so far lol so thats why its so short and incomplete.


My heart was pounding out of my chest as I jumped another fence. What had I done? Why did this happen? Just this morning I was a carefree and innocent kid. My whole life of good deeds, wasted. I rounded another corner. I’ve never been a lucky person. I was in the wrong place at the wrong time. I jumped behind a dumpster and waited.

“Where is he? I saw him run over here.”

I threw a rock toward the street.

“I heard something over there. He went this way!”

I listened as the footsteps died away. As soon as the last one dissipated I ran the opposite direction. That was close…


ya its highly lacking and thats why i could use all the advice i could get :/






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Somber_isis_Queen
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commentCommented on: Thu May 29, 2008 @ 10:42pm
huh.
screw your other story i guess....

xD

nice cliff hanger...
haha i can't really give an opinion till i see more


commentCommented on: Thu May 29, 2008 @ 10:49pm
im writing multiple XD and yes i need to work more on both



Daft Punk Human After All
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FadingSilhouette
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commentCommented on: Mon Jul 14, 2008 @ 04:50am
Hmmm... this is like the other story in one way. You kept me reading and yearning for more. I like the way this story is going and hope for more of your creations. That's a thumbs up from me. =^^=


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