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What makes me tick.
Enter Arcadian - disturbed author
Arcadian sighed as he saved his latest chapter. He had been writing for the better half of the day, and had seen the sun set long ago. The novelist sat back and finished off his drink before stretching his shoulders. This part of the story had taken a bit more work then usual, due to a sudden and haunting heightening of violent imagination. Such a curse would usually be welcome to a dark tale, but wielding it has taken a tax on the young author.

Glancing at the screen, and then towards his bed, he decided to call it quits for the night. His pillow beckoned like a soft siren, and his will was naught against its charm. His eyes struggled to stay shut when he blinked, and thus he soon found himself embracing his sheets, not recalling the walk over to them in the slightest.

Then the silence hit, like an avalanche. His calm heartbeat was quick to break it, however, before consuming it, and shouting it back through his body. Blood ran through his ears like a waterfall, casting a background to his cardiac rhythm. These drums warded off sleep unlike any drug, and despite his intentions there was no path to rest tonight.

Again.

Holding his knees to his chest, Arcadian tried to focus on the shadows surrounding his bed. The endless but heavy energy of insomnia was lifting him back to dreadful inactivity. He mulled over his current location for a moment, and stepped onto the floor as he discovered his newly parched throat. A glass of water was only a kitchen away, and it's not like he had anything else to do in his current state.

The darkness held no resistance to his shambling body, and Arcadian meandered with but a single eye open towards the faucet. Swaying in his idle stance, the writer fetched a glass from his cupboard and held it beneath the flowing water, and watched the dark coagulation fill the container.

He paused for a moment and focused through the half-full glass of water, then shook his head before gulping down the crisp, cold liquid. Too much thinking, not enough sleep. A trick of the light, or lack thereof. He concentrated on the fading chill through his body, and promptly lost himself in the temporal ocean.

Arcadian was quick to read but slow to realize the words weren't in his mind, and it took several chapters before he noticed he was reviewing his story. A brief worry melted as he pondered how he got from his kitchen to his computer, but it was soon vapor as the screen demanded his attentions. He was once again succumbing to his insomnia, and as if by some automatic hand went back to his work.

***

Logan Knight sighed from his perch in the windowsill of the apartment, the full moon casting a contrast across his bold features. A haze drifted from the cigarette he lazily held between his fingers, before being quickly dispersed by an exhalement of smoke from the man's lungs. His gray eyes watched the horizon with what could only have been described as smoldering hope.

Moans and bellows echoed up from the street below. Primal frustration called the curious undead from all around as the zombies and ghouls failed terrifically at reaching the still-dripping corpses of Knight's brief comrades. They would have wanted it like this, getting their revenge in the most destructive way possible.

He watched the puddles of petrol glow in the moonlight. The overturned cars and bent fencing created a wonderful container for trapping an ever growing number of flesh-craving monstrosities. Those who still bear clothes had long since dirtied them with flammable filth, and their naked brethren were suitably tinder. Cigarettes could only last so long, but still longer than Knight's patience.

One last drag, and the survivor flicked the tobacco embers out over the street beneath him. A street saturated with gasoline, populated with trapped zombies, and the last stand of a handful of folks who were in the wrong city at the wrong time. A handful of folks who now dangle above a crazed crowd of death, leaking the last of their body's blood upon those who should not be.

An aura of flame spread swiftly under the feet of the now twice damned. It was like a dragon's maw slowly opening to swallow the roadway whole. A dull roar and hiss steamed from the thousands of licking tongues now, precluding the sudden moment when the wyrm would breathe. For when it did, everything beneath Logan Knight was engulfed in a furious heat that only demons would care to match.

The consequences of such an act had been previously thought through to a certain degree by the chef in question. Preparing the bait - further mutilating the bodies of former allies - was a necessary evil in order to survive. The undead would come from blocks away to get a taste of liquid life. The containers of gasoline would detonate from the fire and perhaps catch the attention of choppers in the distance. The smell of burning human flesh would permeate the city, and aid in Knight's escape as a distraction to the monsters.

But the resulting scream, from when scores upon scores of hungered souls cry out in suffering, is something which scars the very core of one's soul. Echoing and reverberating, the screeches of agony leapt into the sky off the straight angles of abandoned buildings. Knight's eyes widened and his heart quickened from the sheer weight of the sound, and his skin was soon textured from chills.

Clutching his ears, Knight ducked into the darkened room to briefly escape the cries. He slammed the windowpane down and locked it out of instinctual fright, a slight beading of sweat forming around his forehead and neck. He didn't know it then, but he would never be able to forget the noise he had orchestrated that night, and it would haunt him until his last day.

***

Jerking his head off the desk, Arcadian's eyes were alert with surprise. He could hear the screams coming from outside his home. The drapes waved in the night breeze and displayed wicked shadows from terrors looking within. His clammy skin told him the temperature was much cooler than what he remembered, but was then quite warm. His heartbeat next caught his attention, and brought him back to reality, and to the wails of the alarm clock shrieking at him from his room.

With a heavy, shaking breath he looked at the early morning time as he snuffed the sound. He struggled for the moment to recall why he had set his alarm so early, and soon remembered the book signing he agreed to do down in the city. He sighed, rubbing his arms as he remembered the soul shattering screams. The yawn came and went, and he started to get ready for his last day as a writer.






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Ablazed
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commentCommented on: Sat Aug 20, 2005 @ 11:13pm
Wow! This is amazing, Arc! Your description is absolutely beautiful, and I loved reading it. Very, very nice. 3nodding


commentCommented on: Sun Aug 21, 2005 @ 07:25am
I agree...

You describe stuff really good!

I wish I had that ability...

I think that's something I lack.



Kris The Seraphim
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Gendou
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commentCommented on: Sun Aug 21, 2005 @ 08:26am
I'm interested to see where this goes.


commentCommented on: Wed Aug 24, 2005 @ 09:45pm
Ya got talent, mister. I can't do that kind of writing at all, my "skills" if you can call them that, are in totally different areas. I need to write more like you!



CCMinerva
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Triste Morningstar II
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commentCommented on: Fri Sep 16, 2005 @ 03:01am
Oh, you spooky b*****d. That's sick. SICK, I SAY. heart

Your description is incredible. Mine tends to be unbearably dull, and rather sparse. xd


commentCommented on: Sat Sep 17, 2005 @ 10:14pm
That's...that's simply amazing. I have no idea what's going on, but damn it's intriguing.



Danti
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commentCommented on: Mon Sep 26, 2005 @ 05:37am
Long as I've known you, I wasn't aware you could write. Your descriptions are quite good, and your ability to describe the madness of the mind is a very rare thing. I appreciate how it was done. Keep it up.


commentCommented on: Sat Oct 08, 2005 @ 09:24pm
This has Axioma's stamp of approval.

Initially, I disliked Knight's name, but then I realized it made sense. While it is stupid for a character I'm supposed to accept as real to have name like, say, Jack Howitzer or Rick Magnum, it makes perfect and beautiful sense for an admitted literary character to have a name like that.

You're not a stranger to insomnia, are you.



Axioma
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RubyAshes
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commentCommented on: Sat Oct 08, 2005 @ 09:28pm
Damn, Arc. You can write. heart


commentCommented on: Mon Oct 10, 2005 @ 03:01am
Okay, harsh and polite criticism requested.

Let's get a few things straight first off; I like the story, I like the idea, I like the concept, I like the set-up, I like the flow. If I didn't, I wouldn't comment at all, ya dig?

But since harsh criticism was wanted as well...

There are a few random tense-shifts that are out of place in various parts of the text. They're few and fairly far between, but still noticeable. Oh, and if your water is a "dark coagulation", I really wouldn't recommend attempting to drink it. I'm completely with Axioma on the "Logan Knight"-name, by the way.

Sometimes, it's better to walk than to peregrinate in a story, if you catch my drift. Too many... not necessarily big, but perhaps alternative words aren't really needed. While I can see not wanting to repeat a word in a sentence or a (shorter) paragraph, overusing uncommon phraseology can easily make it look like you're just checking a thesaurus for synonyms before settling on a word. I don't know if that's what you did, but it can seem like it if you're not careful. The exact same thing goes for doing it in casual conversation as well, for the record - I don't believe I've seen you do that, but just as a general aside; however, I find it to be rather rude to tell the people I've seen do it so if they haven't asked for my opinion.

Those are the things that stick out in my mind at the moment. I'm not sure if the story's supposed to be self-contained or if there'll be more. If it's self-contained, then perhaps some more insight into (or at least hints about) why it's his last day as a writer might be interesting.

I think that's about all I can think of at the moment. 3nodding



Deep Vermillion
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Sir William Black
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commentCommented on: Thu Oct 13, 2005 @ 07:52am
Wow, this is very good, Arc. I'll be sure to keep up with this one. 3nodding


commentCommented on: Mon Oct 24, 2005 @ 02:28am
Very nice. I love the imagery in this, I can visualize this very easily in my head.

I wish to see more of your writing. 3nodding



AllianceSJR
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Bibbly
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commentCommented on: Wed Dec 14, 2005 @ 08:59am
It gave me the happy in a sinful place! Much luv for your face heart <3


commentCommented on: Sun Dec 18, 2005 @ 05:01pm
I'd like to see more. I've read shared world stories before, and would like to see more. I agree with Deep, though. The language is very dense. The trick to it is to treat language like a camera and filters. When you're choosing words, you're selecting what the viewer takes notice of, and if the reader is drawn to notice, there has to be a reason why.



Romuel
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Katane
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commentCommented on: Tue Jun 27, 2006 @ 06:08am
This comment may be 6 months behind the rest, but I just wanted you to know I liked it. 3nodding


commentCommented on: Fri Aug 17, 2007 @ 06:21am
eek ...wow... eek



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Taossong
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commentCommented on: Wed Apr 23, 2008 @ 03:26pm
OMGOMGOMG that was amazing ur ability to turn words into art and actually make sense of it is absolutely amazing i have no words i was dazed while writing this after reading ur text.


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