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My Insane Ramblings.
i quit my other...i'm going back to bad poetry...
#8 intruder.
since no one like ever read what iwrite at the top of these things...i'm making it bigger...

i really had forgotten about the guy at the deli....but it poped into my head when i was writing this...first i was going to make it as where a whole bunch of...ah...'victems' *lol* came and resqued her...but the guy was perfect... and i think you can figure out what the illness doed to there victems if you read the first journal entry...=P anyway...back to this...rather odd story...=P

and i still want your guyses vote on what to call the recap...*see last post info/top thingy*


wahmbulance wahmbulance Susan stared, her back shoved against the wall. it WAS the guy from the deli!
"ah, it seems you remenber me, how conveinent." his voice was hoarse. she noticed how pale he was. and a though crossed her mind. but she dissmissed it almost at once.
The man sighed and tuged at the end of his Black coat, and held out his hand. "Come." susan blinkedhis voice echoed kinda and she felt the begining of a headache. But she couldn't help herself...she staggered forward.

" w-what are you doing to me?!" she tried to lean back but only ended up over balancing and she landed on her butt. she tried to scoot back...but her arms would move.
"oh go to sleep" his hand was the last thing she remembered, before evreything wen't black.
wahmbulance wahmbulance

sorry ...i would continue...but i gotts to go do my laundry...i'll see if i can edit later...






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Neko_Bri
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commentCommented on: Wed Jul 09, 2008 @ 11:53pm
AHHHHHH!! ANOTHER CLIFFIE!
gaaaaaaaaaah.....
more pleases. ^^


commentCommented on: Sat Jul 12, 2008 @ 02:51am
You write action really well and the dialogue along with it is also really realistic. I loved seeing her reaction to the man and this just keeps me wanting to read more. please let me know when you post another entry! XD



Winry_Rockbell799
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