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A colision of worlds



Something Missing Ok, wrote this about a friend of a friend..not much else to say I don't know you anymore this mask that you wear is strange the crying clown, a mask of death your own face suits you better I liked it when we talked, when we walked, when everything was bright. Time stood still or spead by at our bidding. But no more. You've joined the crowds the masses and the hords a foolish jester for so called friends who'd drop you like a hat Moody and faulse a bird caged inside your own view of reality.

Posted by: kyuuka Sun Sep 04, 2005 @ 11:08pm

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moonlit-blue-rose
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Commented on: Tue Sep 06, 2005 @ 10:13pm


	wow...kyuuka. You must feel realy strongly about the subject to have so perfectly captured those thoughts and emotions in your poem. You can realy express through your words, I love the fact that they don't rhyme, that way, poetry is not so cheesy and its much more powerfull. The reference to the the clown, the mask, a jester...Perfect!* they tell the reader how fake the person is, how stupid pretending is. I realy like the subject. Its powerfull and I think your words frame it so poeticly. Thats a potent subject, realy great for poets. (enough with the analizing) To put it the blond way, 4laugh I liked it alot! Good For You Keep up the good work*

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