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The Life and Times of the Broadway Prodigy
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Fall
Fall is hunting summer,
The leaves that fall are each a separate bummer.
Say goodbye to the beach,
It's now out of reach.
Say goodbye to the sun,
As well as all the summer fun.
Say hello to the early night,
It's pointless to try to fight.
Say hello to light autumn coats,
And adios to the beautiful sailboats.
The fall is here at last,
Summer '08 a thing of the past.
All of my poems should be featured in Rent,
So please, leave a comment =]

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Destiny is not deafening, but it hushed me like a child.




User Comments: [1]
endearingly eponine
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Sun Nov 16, 2008 @ 01:26pm


Hey, it's me AGAIN. Just wanted to point out that some of the rhymes in this poem seemed really forced (ex: summer/bummer), so it lost some power in it's presentation in that regard. Also, the lines were a little uneven-the rhythm was kind of off because some lines had more syllables than the line that followed.
Hope you don't mind the advice!
~dXq


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