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okay once upon a time a man in the snowy tundra lies there surrond by red snow [of course he's bleeding]with his guysa[his magical sword all guysa's are swords]inpaled in his stomach but he had finally done it he had finally defeated the one who he saught out to kill and he was happy he didn't care much about his wound because he could heal it but it was too late and a loud screem ..............ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...............

chapter 1 begin's

mongo jinri the leader of the shadow bandits the world most deadly
swordsman clan a man among many a man that needed to die quick because of his treasonous ways he was the perfect allie but the worst allie too have soo it was a win-win and also lose-lose situation and if u had too pick a allie it must be him



chapter 2 will be written if u like the story so pm me






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Night Kunoichi
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Wed Dec 31, 2008 @ 05:37am


Well, it has some good bones to it. As in from what I can make out of the plot line is good. But the grammar needs some work, like spelling mistakes. Now, this might be just me but I am 'anti txt tlk.' When I see that, it tells me that the person is sloppy with their work. Others may not view it that way and I'm not saying you are but when you read a story where someone doesn't even bother to type out the complete word makes you think they've written it sloppily. But, that may be just me. But anywhos, practice makes perfect! But keep it up! mrgreen


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