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Please read ! I want to know which poem is better. Please rate it from 1-5. It's something important so please help ! 1. When the time comes that I'll be leaving for a new life. My memories shall one day fade away like a Dove in the breeze, seen once, and to never be seen again. If you shall try to catch me, I am going to fade away forever like a butterfly in the moonlight. I have gone to far to come back into the world of reality, I'm falling into a world of dreams. Love sick with a melody of depression, something to make me cry. Give me a reason why I shouldn't fade. Give me a reason why. Tell me why. Leave me to fade then if I have no point in life. It's so hard to say good bye, but I have to leave because I'm not apart of your plans. But now that your gone. I am holding back the tears. Glistening with the hope, that one day, shall fade away like I did, from everyone's memories forever. - Gigi Mak, 2009 2. When the time comes that I'll be leaving for a new life. My memories shall one day fade away like a Dove in the breeze, seen once, and to never be seen again. If you shall try to catch me, I am going to fade away forever like a butterfly in the moonlight. Glistening with hope, that one day, shall fade away like I did, from everyone's memories forever. - Gigi Mak, 2009 Thanks everyone <3

Posted by: lil_kitty_TNA Sat Apr 04, 2009 @ 12:59am

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Commented on: Sat Apr 04, 2009 @ 01:38am


	i like the first one better just because of the quality and how interesting it is!! =3 - kimchi`

Commented on: Sat Apr 04, 2009 @ 02:01am


	Thank youss (:

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Commented on: Sat Apr 04, 2009 @ 08:19pm


	1) 4.5 - It was really awesome! 2) 3 - It wasn't as awesome as the first, but it was still good. PS: I rated it out of five. whee

Commented on: Sat Apr 04, 2009 @ 08:20pm


	Thanks Dawnie (:

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- L i T e Y -
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Commented on: Sat Apr 04, 2009 @ 08:20pm


	They're both ok but you use the word "Shall" too much in the first poem and also the word "Fade" I dunno i think the first one is more detailed so yeah..xD why'd you write these poems? tell me on MSN : ) <HI>

Commented on: Sat Apr 04, 2009 @ 08:22pm


	Thanks for the feedback - L i T e y - (:

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Commented on: Sat Apr 04, 2009 @ 10:16pm


	Both are good . But I hate both (: Its just .. Just not .. HAPPY . Make it happy , or Else its DEAD (: JKJKJK! Their awesome. I like the second one better . P: -changechannel

Commented on: Sat Apr 04, 2009 @ 10:26pm


	Thanks for the feedback Snow-Chan (:

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Commented on: Sat Apr 04, 2009 @ 11:00pm


	the first one seems so long neutral but i guess i'll go with the first one biggrin

Commented on: Sat Apr 04, 2009 @ 11:06pm


	Thanks Hornson (:

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Commented on: Thu Apr 09, 2009 @ 02:05am


	Like the first one too. xd

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