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MI PLACE TO RITE!
not a diary a journal
Death

The tingling sensation
The darkness comsuming me
My eyes closing on the last light of day i will ever see
The peacefull feeling of
Death

Summer

The green leaves
The blue,red,and white flowers
The sweet sound of firecrackers in July
That's what i am longing for..
Summer
Not the torture cell they call school

Music

Must
Unite with
Sound
In
Complete harmony

Speechless

I cant see anyone but him
When he smiles my heart melts
When he talks to me all I can think is...
Hes talking to me
Hes so smart
Wait he stopped talking...
And hes looking at me
Oh i kno why! wait a second...
TALK BACK YOU IDIOT!

Bus 197

The roaring of voices
The ipods up so loud you can hear them
The perverted jokes the latest gossip all around
The squeak of the doors
Its must be a friday afternoon on bus 197

3 Minutes

Im waiting for the bell to ring
While the teacher drones on
I look at the clock. 3 more mintues of tourture
She keeps going as if no time is passing...
2 minutes
I wonder if she will ever stop..
1 minute
Better pack up my stuff
*RINNNGGGGG*
Im free... until the next class



I kno i rite alot but i dont kno which ones to post in the arena. i need ur guys help. post some comments on which 1 u like. and the 1 tht gets the most comments i will post in the arena.thanx! luv ya!






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Katrinaisisabelina
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commentCommented on: Tue Jun 23, 2009 @ 07:23pm
Well, speaking strickly from a song writer's perspective (i'm not a poet and never profess to be) I think that they should flow a bit smoother. The meaning and use of similes is great but the all seem a bit abrupt. Perhaps 3 minutes would be a good submission. But like I said I'm not a poet so really don't listen to me! sweatdrop


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