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Hey everyone! (or, more likely, no-one!) Here's a poem I'm gunna enter in the arena. If they like it, I'm gunna give it to my bf. But, first, I wanna know if there's some things I should change. Please be a critic and tell me everything that's wrong with it!!

I could live, for a million years,
but if your not there,
I don't know,
how to survive,
cause your my one,
my only love,
your my life, my star,
your my true love,
your the one,
i think about,
every night,
the only way,
i sleep at night,
and for you,
you can dispel,
anyone, that you chose,
but me, to me,
you are, my
angel.