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Nn.
I'll write stuff here when I'm tired so I can look back when I'm awake and can laugh at it.
po - ems
one, the titles are dumb, I'm aware. I'm bad at ... titling things.
two, I like making poems that are related but aren't the same poem, ie, the first two. So, they're like, sister poems.There are some haiku that are more obviously related. They aren't related if they aren't next to each other, but just because they're by each other are doesn't really mean anything. Yeah.
three, some of them are absolutely stupid. And they might not make any sense to you. But I get them, so ask if you really, really care to know. The poems start out pretty bad, but I think they get better. 8/
four, they are all Hetalia related, but no next - gen this time. I would hope you could tell by reading them, because while I wasn't direct, I tried to make it somewhat obvious who they're about.
five, I like being told what sucks about the things I write, so if you don't want to read the same old crap every time, let me know what just didn't work. I'll try to work it out. ~
six, conversely, let me know what did work so I can keep doing it. Thank you, enjoy ~

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The Youth of 4000 Years

Slender, nearly womanly
In figure
Hair long and black as the night can get
Face soft and young

Is this the picture of youth?
Prodding the stomach in examination
Could be, but define youth
4000 give - or - take, seems like it

4000 is
4000 instances
40000 times producing
400000 pressures and worries and love

What of the pressure of fear?
Of time?
Of choices?
Choices so dear or choices so crucial
More than one life depends upon them

And the rest of the world disapproves
Without exaggeration.
The Red was for the benefit of all
But it brought about the oposite
Don't knock on the neighbor's door.
He's sunk as well.

Something is struck
A chord, maybe,
in the souls of fellow countrymen
that maybe it takes one to know one
and maybe you're the only ones
and thus, the only ones who can help themselves
unless, you can help each other

It's only begun
A journey so long
Maybe it'll take 4000 years more
To get to the end of the road.

Will you regret it?
No?
Will he?
No?
So what's the worry?
There's no rush if you've all got the lifetime
of forevermore

Sunflowers Live Forever

Somebody hurt you
Hide behind a grin
Beat the smile out of their smirk

No one will stop you
Big and mighty as you are
Unless you want a kind word
Or a gesture of love

You won't crumble, right?
You certainly won't cry?
You can't, you know.
Too many depend on the hidden.

Childish anger gets you nowhere
Buck up like your sister taught you so
Hope you listened
Too much depends on the forgotten

Don't drink away the goal.
Vodka doesn't sooth the soul.
Sunflowers and warmth come only of hard work.
Spare the effort

Learn.
It's okay to depend.
It's no good to go alone.
There's someone else who needs a savior
knocking at your door.
together, you will learn.

You will learn to love.
More than ever before
You will have loved.


In Greece

Watching intently
But
Not paying any attention
The difference is in his expression
It's just the same
Like all that philosophical wisdom

Sleeping
Again
What's on his mind?
The lover's torso in his arms
What more could he need?
More sleep.

In Key of H Minor

More precise than a puppet's limbs
Fingers nimble, yet elegant
Dancing
Gliding
Lightly sliding across the keys

Not a second wasted
Despite glasses pushed up the bridge
Focused?
Not really
A show off?
A bit.
All for her

And she's swaying
Humming
Soul dancing to the music
As she scrubs the floors
It's for her
All for her
Everything for her
And not once will she act on it

There's A Cross He Visits Sometimes

So young
A lovely little nineteen
And so willing to give herself up
Rebellion and bloodshed
No matter

Would it be so hard to thank her?
The nation
Owes it to her
To do at least a little

And he will visit sometimes
The little cross like all the rest
A bouquet of white lilies
All wrapped in black
A few moments is all he can spare
It's snowing
It's cold
And he's a busy man
But he lingers an extra second to thank her
Jeanne d'Arc

What Power?

Portugal?
What happened to your power, Portugal?
You were ahead of your time
You had the finest navy in all the land
Did you get bored?
Were you too weak?
Did you get lazy?
Or careless?
Or did you bend and break to the surrounding counries?
Not that I can blame you.
Spain is pretty kick-a**.

Winter Warmth

Ground frozen over
Strong arms keep internal warmth
Inferno - lit room

Do You Regret it Yet?

The only movement is
the p***k of a tear
on the water's suface
which feels like we are floating above

We are his child
sleeping lightly in my womb
And we are myself
wondering if we will be all there ever is
if she will remain a painful reminder of
the love he promised us
with his actions

We will always
have love in our hearts
I can only hope
she doesn't resemble
too closely

Unless he comes back for us

Purple I

cheerful eyes look up
amythest truly treasured
by those of pure ice

Purple II

purple - eyed looks back
likes those cold eyes just as much
such things are confessed

Purple III

not inherited
terrifying as papa
has those eyes of snow

Pre - Warring Time

everything is still
darkness has not left the land
dawn reveals the guns

Warring Time

there is red about
the world is mourning itsself
final man sees dark

Post - Warring time

nothing thinks to move
far more silent then before
death is everything

Purple

the gayest color
such colored crayons disposed
anthem of the French

You are Sweet

' you are sweet '
says the hopelessly endowed woman
to the awkward bespecticled man
he grips a single bloom

' you're far too sweet '
says the sarcastic frying pan weilder
to the truely broken - hearted albino
this is as refined as it gets

' you are ... sweet '
says the blushing far - easterner
to his calm counterpart,
offering up his cat

' you're so sweet! '
says the frozen - nosed blond
to the equally cold giant
who has swept him off his feet

' you're not even sweet! '
says the flustered pretender
to that stupid grin
who laughs it off

' ve, so sweet! '
says the uselessly happy wimp
to the scowling caretaker
who can't hold back a smile

' you're sweet '
says an old - timer who's always looked young
to the one with a terrible grin
who has given more than ever before

' you're ... sweet '
says a tea drinker
to his hero
he is obviously pleased

' ... '
says the one who never speaks
to the one who never shows his face
he interprets it how he pleases

' you aren't sweet '
says a blunt but teasing northerner
to the playful drinker
who tries much too hard

' you are sweet '
says the woman among the lotuses
to the man who lives for his romances
as he bows to lay a kiss on her hand

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  • User Comments: [1]
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    Fri Jan 29, 2010 @ 05:04am


    hahahaha ~~
    critique is awesome ( /because I am so qualified to give it? ;; ) yeah. c:

    The Youth of 4000 Years
    "Is this the picture of youth?
    Prodding the stomach in examination
    Could be, but define youth
    4000 give - or - take, seems like it

    4000 is
    4000 instances
    40000 times producing
    400000 pressures and worries and love"

    I like that part. c:

    "Maybe it'll take 4000 years more
    To get to the end of the road."

    again; I like. I don't know why.


    Sunflowers Live Forever
    "Don't drink away the goal.
    Vodka doesn't sooth the soul."

    I think the whole thing might be more powerful if it's rhymed.
    js. c:
    however; very nice overall.

    In Greece
    "The lover's torso in his arms
    What more could he need?
    More sleep."

    I love that line, but the word torso ..
    just doesn't fit. ;;; it seems too ..
    I'm not sure; bulky? for the line.
    whilst the whole of the poem is like water.
    8DD ;; if that makes any sense at all.

    In Key of H Minor
    the repetition works very nicely. ~
    and the last line; very very well done.

    There's A Cross He Visits Sometimes
    "It's snowing
    It's cold
    And he's a busy man"

    I like how well that sets a scene, so simply, in so few words.
    yet it put a perfect image in my head. ( /nod )
    the ending is sort of weak, though, but you'd have to change it around
    to make it work better. ;;

    What Power?
    .. .. lolol
    I don't even know.
    But I love this one the best. XDD

    Winter Warmth
    huh.
    the middle line, I dun think it goes very well;
    nor does the last fit in at all.

    Do You Regret it Yet?
    Please explain this one to me, tomorrow or something. ;;;

    Pre - Warring Time
    ack! I love the last line!
    it's very .. clever, in a way.
    well done. ~
    ( /clapclapclapclap ) bravoooo ~ :"D

    Purple
    .. indeed it is.
    <333

    You are Sweet
    what I like best about this one, is that it sets up so many couples
    in so many places and situations and stuff; and connects them all
    with one alike statement. that's a very clever device, I think; some
    of the lines could have been written a little better, but overall, I like it. ~

    ---

    8DDD ;;
    okay. yeppp.
    I liked how all of these were just so. You. cx
    don't stop practicing, yes ~ ? you're so good already.


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