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This is just a sample from a book I'm writing, if you could please help me out by telling me if it's good or not, I would greatly appreciate it. Well, here goes...

A little boy, no more than seven years of age sat in the middle of a dark, deserted street. Rain poured down upon him and hid blood red hair fell over his blank eyes. He raised his right hand to the sky, palm facing upward. The bandages encasing his arm suddenly shredded, revealing a black slitt running vertically on his palm. Out of the slit a shadows darted out, followed by another, and another, ntill 20 shadows surrounded him. When he lowered hi hand, as if on que, the shadows converged on him and he let out a terrible scream. Once the screaming had ended he stood up not making a sound, and darted down the road faster than any human could. He reached a nearby town withing an hour and let out an inhuman shriek and all the residents of the town came out of their houses and stared at him. His eyes had changed to pure black, and streaks of black ran through his hair. He grinned evily a clenched his left hand, laughing evily as a nearby man expoloded in a shoqer of blood. The villagers tried to run, but an invisible barrier blocked them from escaping. Within an hour the small boy had bathed his body in the blood of all the villagers. The shadows left his body and left from his sight. His eyes changed back to their usual blankness and the black streaks disappeared from his hair. As if he had been in a coma he looked around wildly, not knowing any of the events that had just occured. As he saw the blood that covered him from head to toe he screamed as loudly as he could. He grabbed a shattered bone from the ground and, unable to deal with the deaths he knew he had caused, shoved it through his temple, killing him instantly.