Ok, personally I think this one sucks. It's going in the arena though, so I need opinions and fast! And constructive criticism would be much appreciated!
Always trapped, forever chained,
Never to roam the heavens again.
She stays fierce, stands tall, yet gentle remains.
Until, at last, her freedom calls.
The angel so beautiful, so merciful, and kind.
Who left the heavens in order to find
A way to make life better for humankind,
Yet the demons hath brought her to fall.
In her future a judgement now looms.
She worries not whether redemption or doom.
She only wants for their happiness soon,
Happiness for one and all.
Always trapped, forever chained,
Never to roam the heavens again.
She stays fierce, stands tall, yet gentle remains.
Until, at last, her freedom calls.
The angel so beautiful, so merciful, and kind.
Who left the heavens in order to find
A way to make life better for humankind,
Yet the demons hath brought her to fall.
In her future a judgement now looms.
She worries not whether redemption or doom.
She only wants for their happiness soon,
Happiness for one and all.
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I wasn't always in chains,
I was a normal angel.
till the demons and temptations rendered me soulless.
I live in shame.
now in shackles,
I live below the heavens,
for my punishment,
where I repent
This beautiful angel
who was once revered
and proud of what she was
has fallen
She was tempted by demons
but her folly was that she lost control.
and now, in exile,
she lives a normal, mortal life