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Things I write for no apparent reason other than to pass the time. Most stories have no endings, but contain an awful lot of meaningless dialogs. Other entries are basically boring life occurrences that have nothing to do with my stories whatsoever.
Here's the last of the sucky ending to the Hotel Story
She ran back up the steps before anyone could stop her. Her gown snagged on the door casing, but she did not care. After she climbed the stairs she began to feel weak and clumsy. She climbed another flight of stairs and she saw the girl again. The girl was crying and shaking her head at her. “What are you doing?! I can’t save you now! It’s too late!” The girl disappeared as Eva tried to follow her. The smoke filled her lungs making her feel dizzy until finally she collapsed on the stairway.
Her dress was torn when they found her and she was long dead. Her pale form was somehow spared despite the charred wood all around her.

The old woman shook her head. “That fire consumed their beginning. Charlie was distraught. George did finally have to take over the business, because Charlie could not. William survived, as well as Marie and all the hotel staff. As far as I can remember Eva was the only casualty and long after the fire the hotel was looked as a bitter sweet luxury. Sure people returned and fell in love with this place, but it was never the same.” She set the teacup down, “Sometimes I feel as though she is still here watching over Charlie.”
“But who was that girl?” The reporter asked.
“That’s another story and another reason I look at this hotel as bittersweet. The girl died here as well and I knew her also, but I must be off to bed, it is getting late.” She stood and made her way out the door.
The reporter pushed a button on her recorder and smiled as she too left the restaurant behind her to write the story she had just heard.


xp I know it's sucky, so you don't have to tell me. The title I had put on it was The Fire Before the Beginning which obviously tells too much...The story is based on an idea I got after seeing the Hotel Conneaut at the theme park. They have this really cool ghost story about a fire that occurred in the hotel around, I believe WWII (I could be wrong and it being WWI, check Wikipedia) about newly weds getting split apart in the fire and the guy surviving, while the chick still haunts the place looking for him. I based this in the Gilded Age, simply because I was stupid and unaware of the time the fire actually occurred sweatdrop . Another occurred in 1908 which fits close enough!! scream so don't hate me!!! Anyways....I like this dude burning_eyes he fits with the story too.






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Lydia LaRoche
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commentCommented on: Thu Jun 21, 2007 @ 08:23pm
The ending's fine, except for being a little rushed. But who's this little girl? you gotta tell me!
oh girl you gotta let me know should i stay or should I go
*random moment*
anyways, i liked the story. but if you look back, the spelling of the old woman's name changes from audrea to andrea a lot.


commentCommented on: Thu Jun 21, 2007 @ 08:51pm
Curse you spell check!!!! scream Audrea is her name.. sweatdrop



amusedwriter
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SoxxDisastrous
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commentCommented on: Thu Jun 21, 2007 @ 10:00pm
That was really excellent.


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