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what goes on in my crazy mind
This is basically where i put all my poems
zero period
Zero Period
warm light from the sun
gently rains upon me
the wind, blowing through my hair
so soft and caressing
as I rest in the shade
my back against the wall
the group of students, to my left
chatters quietly away
the chemistry, which was saved for today
is now finished, few problems left unsolved
I await the arrival, of the teacher
so the door may be opened
but alas, it remains shut
-Luke Peterson






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Pink Rain Today
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commentCommented on: Mon May 04, 2009 @ 05:22pm
While your poem isn't super impressive [it's good, though]- how you used the sun to "rain" on you. I've never considered using those sensory details in that way before. I really liked it.


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