wow. that's really sad but it's very beautiful, especially in the last two paragraphs(stanzas?). There's some grammatical errors, especially in line 7.
what does your dad do, again? I have no idea. I remember your mom said a cowboy called her one day at work....
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SeanV · Community Member · Wed Feb 15, 2006 @ 07:36am
Nice, I don't go it for free form poetry much but that was nice. Couple little grammatical things, but awesome nonetheless.
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Aahz · Community Member · Sun Apr 30, 2006 @ 03:52am
Honestly....I may look gangsta but I truly luv poetry sweatdrop .....and THAT, that right there was sad, but beautiful!!! heart I luved it!! 3noddingbiggrin Would you add me to your friends list plz questionsmile
P.S. I normally don't talk like this whee
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colangelo · Community Member · Tue Apr 15, 2008 @ 09:21am