- Title: Final Flash
- Artist: Hybird
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Description:
"The quick swipe of his blades hummed like a furious swarm of bees. His body quickly spun and danced around his once blood thirsty foes. Not one of their heavy arsenal could touch him. This sadistic, gorgeous, deadly yet beautiful dance of death was common to him. Their blood that dripped onto his dry tongue tasted disgusting. A foul taste of a hollow victory, and meaningless death."
Again, re-entered with suggested changes. - Date: 08/09/2009
- Tags: final flash
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Comments (7 Comments)
- XxBabii_AxX - 08/13/2009
- It looks like bumblebee from transformers xD but still kool ^^
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- O IVI E G A - 08/13/2009
- X3 I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!
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- Mitskuni Honeynozuka - 08/13/2009
- OMFG 5/5 also the name is good and copying dbz vegita final flash
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- Shia La boeuf - 08/13/2009
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You know u Could be BumbleBee on Transformers...xD/////////// CuteShiek: A NEW TRANSFORMER!? lolz jk/////// how could u be joking he exactly looks like bumblebee except for the sword..... excellent job but u shudve put for accesories like a belt..
and like cannons and stuff or a second weapon....if u couldve do tht i would giv u a 5/5 but 4/5 for me...good job m8 - Report As Spam
- Cryptogon - 08/13/2009
- Maybe to make it, abit MORE dramatic, rename it "The Final Flash" i don't know, it just sounds more catchy, and depicts the scene. but i can see this winning after a few improvements here and there, and honestly i don't say that alot. And as your going for a sort of robotic, technologic feel, maybe add a belt, and a few minor accesories. i will give you a 5 once thats done, until then its a 4.
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- Cryptogon - 08/13/2009
- I think the Goggles are what ruins it. I just find those Goggles very newbish on anyone, even if i wore them. But there was a reason i didn't vote for it last week. The plot and story, for one even in small little descriptions there is always a plot, even if it was sarcastic, there would still be a plot. You don't really give a plot, just a scene, but i'm not sure if thats what you wanted it to come off as.
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- lvl one - 08/13/2009
- nice......you have a good eye....5
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