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- | Submitted on 12/07/2009 |
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- Title: faster then her feet can carry
- Artist: forevrstarz
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Description:
she was with her lover after the ball asChristmas,started to end the moon shone red and her lover came after her like a ravaging wolf!(not related to twilight)and attacked, she took his sword and fled to the forest she ran till the soles of her shoes were torn and the sound of the wolfs' howl was gone. all that was left was her necklace,the sword she stole,tiara and belt which started to break in pieces.as she caught her breath she saw her lover and repaired for a fight of her life.
- Date: 12/07/2009
- Tags: faster then feet carry night
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Comments (5 Comments)
- forevrstarz - 01/04/2010
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@kemppaininthebutt
yeah i agree with you more color would be better but, im trying to portray a dark and scary night. - Report As Spam
- forevrstarz - 01/04/2010
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@bubblymoonstruck
thanks but no thanks grammar is not art especially when you are trying to force fit a story that is longer than the limited space we are given for a description.
you think its easy? go ahead why dont you try fitting a description as great as mine in that puny amount of space we are given? - Report As Spam
- kemppaininthebutt - 12/19/2009
- The story is wonderful biggrin , Your avi is a little plain tho, perhaps balance the colors a bit more? 3/5
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- Devil gangster - 12/18/2009
- the story is very reallistic
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- BubblyMoonstruck - 12/14/2009
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That is just one huge run-on sentence.
Fix up your description first, then try to enter again when you have a better avatar. - Report As Spam
