The Life of Horses

• Artist: Emo Dark Cloud
• Description: A herd of 6 horses must fight to find there true love.The horses names are Sally,Ebony,Stripes,Houston,Steamy,Kelly.They are all wild horses they do talk!!!
• Date: 09/07/2008
• Tags: life horses

Sally dranked from the river she was scared and every horse around her was mean to her.Steamy ran up to Sally butting her with his head.Sally got mad and kicked his head nocking him down. burning_eyes "Why do u guys always fight one day yall will fall in love and figure out that all this fighting didn't solve nothing"said Ebony.Stripes came up to Ebony and nuzzled her trying to tell her not to get into the stupid fight."Ebony u always boss everyone around"said Sally in a angry way. scream Stripes kicked Steamy "Thats for messing with Sally"said Stripes."Stop protecting her"Steamy said.
Every horse finally found there true love Sally and Stripes and Steamy and Ebony.
The End

Comments

[Hush I Is Speaking]

Umm u said there were six horses and in ur story u only talked about 4. And the plot was a little weak srry just constructiv critism

[Hush I Is Speaking]

Umm u said there were six horses and in ur story u only talked about 4. And the plot was a little weak srry just constructiv critism

[xo-Brooke-Ashley-xo]

hey i agree with the people below it need mor creativity more thought into iit

[Emily Hottie2886]

The story is TERRIBLE! I've met second graders that write better then that. For one it doesn't make sense. Two there is NO detail.Three there is no strong words or similes.Four you jumped too fast to the end we don't even know HOW they found true love.So next time you write a story one make it good or DON'T POST IT ON GAIA!!!

[Flint Jakobs]

It shouldn't take emotes to get your characters' emotions to come through. I could be a nitpick and bug about other things, but that was the thing that irked me the most, so I'll leave it at that.

[iLuVhP]

The story makes little sense, though, even though I get the picture