- “There she is,” I heard Erik whisper behind me. I turned to see whom he was talking about and was in awe of what I saw. Coming down the hallway head held high. Her long dark hair cascading down her back and around her shoulders in soft waves, her eyes were like faceted jewels as dark as the night, yet sparkling with brilliance even under the dull florescent glow of the high school’s lights. We watched amazed as she came right up to me and looked me in the eye with her spellbinding gaze and said…
- by sparkle_shimmer13 |
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- | Submitted on 10/19/2008 |
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- Title: hmmmm.... undecided
- Artist: sparkle_shimmer13
- Description: just a little taste of... well actually i don't really know what this is but PLEASE feel free post comments and rate. Enjoy (but DONT STEAL!)
- Date: 10/19/2008
- Tags: hmmmm undecided
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Hana Kim 048 - 07/01/2009
- its awesome! just lke ur first one! keep writing ur really good!
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- TheBlackViolist - 10/26/2008
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im writing a book, and my character is of similar aperence to your...
you should read my book, its called a deadly dream in the areana - Report As Spam
- Julia Dream - 10/26/2008
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There's just nothing here. I don't know if your characters are Mary-Sues because I don't know if you're meaning the "cascading adjectives" to be ironic or not. I mean, honestly, you couldn't have spent another ten seconds on this and given us some direction as to where to look in order to figure out what's going on here?
And why is it in size 23 font? - Report As Spam
- Julia Dream - 10/25/2008
- Why on earth did you waste 100 gold on this?
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