Good night....

• Artist: Hetoku Kitfang
• Description: If your scared of the dark, crazy peolpe, or monsters do not read this unless you got guts.
• Date: 10/21/2008
• Tags: good night

One dark and scary night, a girl named Emily J. Smith went walking through the cemetary to see her grandmother Mary Pope Smith. Every halloween she would walk through the scary cemetary just to see here loved one. But she was 13 this year, she was at a party and did not go she here beloveded grandmother. She was very upset when she awork the next morning. It was the next halloween and Emily was 14 she went to go she here grandmother, but when she walked though the cemetary something was wrong all the grave stones was gone! She ran in fright and fell over a small grave stone it said, Here Lie Emily J. Smith. Emily screamed! But as she rised up something kicked her in to the open hole. Now ever day Emilys sister goes and sees her sister and her grandmother. Dont go into cemetary....alone............

Comments

[-Screaming Stillness-]

um....eheh....you need some practice. As some constructive criticism, you need to work grammar, sentence structure, and your plot line. There isn't enough sense of panic and slowly building terror for this to actually be scary. The characters need a little flesh and bones. Why is the grandma so vindictive when her granddaughter misses one halloween? Please don't take this the wrong way. I'd love to read this story once it's revised a little.