the transformation

• Artist: Luna Deslumbrado
• Description: i found myself in a forest, i was naked. i stood up and walked.
  my hair was so long that it covered my breasts, i tripped and fell into a spring. i was underwater when i saw a bright flash, my legs stuck together and started to change,they went blue, my feet stretched out into a fin.i had transformed into a mermaid.i swam up to the surface. i fell back on land. my tail split in half and went back to my normal skin colour. my fin shrank to make my feet.
  i then stood up, what had happened to me?
• Date: 12/13/2008
• Tags: transformation mermaid barnardistongirl

this is just a story of a girl finding another form of herself.

Comments

[HelloooClarice]

Cool and descriptive!

[Luna Deslumbrado]

theres a pic so you know =]

[Stitchesof_Rosestems]

its a bit.... short.. not that short stories are bad but theirs not much character development.. i mean.. we dont even know her hair color. nice transformation description though

[Luna Deslumbrado]

oh ok, i'll try do better, thanks for the tip!

[b00_2]

What i mean by unsuttle, is that it's too fast. All of the changing just came out of nowhere. I know it's supposed to be like that, but it doesn't quite come together.

[GeiSHaKaKe_hoTTa]

i agree with MachJacob.

[b00_2]

Ehh, it's to unsuttle.