.Just When You Think Its Over.

• Artist: ILuvAsh3
• Description: Sara Luie Ellen [This is a story that i just made up off the top of my head like 5mins ago....lol, its not complete but tell me what you think about the starting of it, like if u think something should be added or not]
• Date: 02/03/2009
• Tags: most interesting story evers chilling

She ran down the hall, her eyes blood shot red from the hours of the night. Panting and shacking in horror of what she had just witnessed, only hoping that the shawdow wouldnt keep up with her. She took her last breath, hoping that someone would figure out her TRUE story. Her eyes slowly and fragily rolled to the back of her head, as the dark figure disapeared into the night.

Reporter: Sara Luie Ellen was a 13 year old girl found dead in Cresant Ville on April 16th 2001. Police say she has been dead for quite awhile now, although there is no cause stated.

Comments

[borderbabe]

I love it! If you were to write more i would totally read it! But with the spelling and grammer I am terrible at both!! Other than that thought it could be really good and i know a lot of people who would read it like five times and still think about reading it again!! =^ ) good luck!

[Hanamura Kana]

you should develop it some more, it could make a good story. work on your spelling and grammer, i noticed some small mistakes, but other than that, i was entertained.
kana

[Werewolf Aisling]

woah, scary stuff. Sounds great to me. Its a good start to an awesome horror/suspense story. Keep on it. Atleast it says more than "Hi"...