shooting star rising dawn

• Artist: I machiko I
• Description: a prolouge from my book about a maiden who has to gather warriors to saving the world from demons and bandits who want to destroy the continent
• Date: 03/05/2009
• Tags: shooting star rising dawn

It is the 3rd year of the star warrior era and the world has fallen to chaos with death and disease and a land ruled by bandits the only hope for the land is the stones of heaven and the star maiden a young priestess chosen by the great stones to gather fighters to defend them and save the kingdom from being destroyed by the demons sealed by the first maiden centuries ago but will they survive the trials ahead.

Comments

[queenofuno]

pretty good

[wakuteka -- x --]

It seemed more like a summary you find in the back of a book rather then prolouge.

[Tsiklop]

It seems pretty good, though it could use more development.

[complicated kid]

not bad

[yamahiney16]

It was a little vague and too hard to follow, but wut i got was good

[Robot Squirrel]

That sounds just like Genbu Kaiden...
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Be a little more ceative next time alright?
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[NarniNarNar]

There is only ONE period in that WHOLE paragraph... neutral
The plot sounded good, but it's hard to follow in the way it's written.