- The cold, murky water opens under the dark sky. The moon shines off the dark water, slightly illuminating the black night. The water breaks under the weight suddenly falling on it. The cold water swallows it up. The blood rises slowly from the fresh hole blown in the weak flesh. It mingles with the water. The water seeps into his pores. Seeps into every opening it can find. Chilling from the inside. It seeps into the hole in his chest. The hole that is slowly leaking the life out of him. Deeper he sinks, being enveloped by the deep waters. He regains consciousness. He feels his lungs filled with the dark, cold water, freezing his core. He gasps for oxygen, as a reflex, but that only forces the water deeper inside of him. He feels the pain of his chest. Both the hole caused by a medium caliber bullet traveling at eight hundred and seventy one meters per second and the water filling lungs that can only breath air. The pain fills his body, a hot fire in the chilling depths. Simultaneously scorching and freezing his skin. He tries to scream, but the dark water swallows the waves of sound. His brain is filled with terror and pain. He can't think. His panic only causes him to swallow more of the liquid surrounding him. He has a fleeting moment of clarity then, nothing. The water envelops him. The lifeless body sinking slowly down, down. Any last pockets of air escape his body and bubble to the surface. The moon looks down upon the dark sea, and the night is silent once again.
- by WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! |
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- | Submitted on 06/14/2009 |
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- Title: The Depths
- Artist: WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
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"The cold, murky water opens under the dark sky. The moon shines off the dark water, slightly illuminating the black night. The water breaks under the weight suddenly falling on it. The cold water swallows it up. The blood rises slowly from the fresh hole blown in the weak flesh. It mingles with the water."
I'd like some criticism por favor. - Date: 06/14/2009
- Tags: depths bullet water death
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Alectix - 06/28/2009
- I put my suggestions on your forum. :] 3/5
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- Fairy22122 - 06/20/2009
- scary but good o.o
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