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I lay in bed, not knowing what i did wrong. My heart said I did something bad but my brain said nothing happened. All i remember is coming home and seeing my parents crying. They sent me to my room but nothing was clear for me. What have i done? What happened? I touched my face, beaten up and bruised.
I must think of memory's. What happened before this? I remember a couple of days ago punching my best friend in the face. I was confused. Why did i do that? I remember people holding me back. I was screaming at my best friend. He lay there on the ground with blood beading down his face. I broke free of the people holding me. I ran as fast as i could out of my school gym. I ran to a dark corner where the cool kids were.
Another flashback came to me. It was yesterday, the sun was setting behind the hills. I remember being chased by some goons. They said i took something from them. They said I needed to pay them back for what i did. The plastic bag in my hand i guess was something important.
Everything is blurry right know. I can barely see anything. Where is my mickey mouse clock I've had since third grade? Of course I couldn't see it. I sold it for money. I needed...... well actually i forget. I remember giving the money to this guy and he handed me this bag but I don't remember what was in it.
Another flashback came to me. I remember a long time ago seeing these guys do ice in a dark corner next to my school gym. My friends and I said we would never do ice because its just stupid.
I still lay in my bed remembering things. A week ago I remember being the best student ever and going to a party and people handing me-- plastic--bags. I reached for my backpack. I looked inside. I saw tons of plastic bags full of ice. I grabbed one and I realized something; I do ice-- I'm a cool kid.
No i wasn't and please do not follow my path. I never had a good life after that. I was in jail most of my life. Don't do it, even if it's just once
- by flluffyness22 |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 07/30/2010 |
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- Title: Smoking Memorys
- Artist: flluffyness22
- Description: This is a story about a boy in high school who gets high on drugs and ice. This is not about anyone i know or me, I made it up only to show crucial things about drugs.
- Date: 07/30/2010
- Tags: smoking memorys
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Comments (2 Comments)
- RebeLLevi RP - 08/04/2010
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~Cons~
Spelling isnt the best. 6/10
The flow is choppy. Not much consistency. 5/10
Vocabulary. Not a bad vocabulary but maybe a slight increase of variety would help. 6/10.
overall not bad! - Report As Spam
- RebeLLevi RP - 08/04/2010
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I approve of the message but I'm here to judge literary content so here goes!
~Pros~
Though fiction, it is a somewhat(unfortunately) common thing. Peer pressure telling you to do something you didn't want to do, but you do it because it makes you "cool". This pertains to other topics as well. On realistic content I give you a 9/10
Message... I highly dissaprove of drugs, and think this is a strong message. The only thing stronger is if he ended up dying, but still a powerful topic. 8/10. - Report As Spam