The Boy

• Artist: Giftii
• Description: One night me and ma bro was watching a scary moive and after we made this scary paragraph
• Date: 12/23/2009
• Tags: theboy street dust

The Boy was walking Down The street
when a cry echoed throw the streets.
The Boy Ran To where he had heard it,
when he arrived he saw on the cold damp
street a body.

A Cold stream of wind whistled throw his ears,
without a warning thunder struke.
Suddenly the boy turned around, saw a shadow
and then turned to dust.

Comments

[Moonlight Crystals]

pretty good one but i think you use the wrong word at the second line of the first paragraph.

[rainbowryda]

pretty good!, 4/5
if it was more descriptive it would have gotten a 5 smile