my love story

• Artist: mayla34
• Description: this is my love story! this is decated to my boyfriend! my friends say its a good song. well heck please give me your veiw on it! again please for give me for spelling wrong. and this song is not a poem. its a song. thanks
  
  -mayla34
• Date: 11/27/2008
• Tags: love story

my love story

i close my eyes
as i feel the lash backs
as i met you
i finaly met the person of my dreams
i couldnt think of any one more than you

but i knew soemthing
you seme like romeo
i could think of my daddy saying stay away
i know i would cry
i dont want you to leave

all the flash backs
all the guys
i know you wont be them
i will be the one

please dont go away
its just a love satory
oh
i sit next to you in front of my locker
we would talk
i knew i love you
when i look into your eyes
i feel safe

you are romeo
and im juleit
i know i would never be alone
please dont go

i want to be with you
you are my prince
and i know you look out for me

Comments

[EliLovee]

hhmmm i like it alice good good good i put 1 star by accident

[Klaora]

I like the story that you are trying to tell, however, it is VERY distorted by your lack of education in English. I highly suggest before you write your next poem, you check up on your spelling, grammar, punctuation, and rhythm. Please, capitalize the word 'I' and use spell check. It's a VERY useful tool. So's proof-reading.
Please don't make English majors cry.