A little bit of raver poetry.

• Artist: Selenite Sugar
• Description: It's nothing speical. I wrote this when I got back from a rave, on a friend's cellphone and saved it as a text. Aren't I amazing? Well, it was GLUED in my brain, I had to ink it someplace!
  Comments and crit is welcome. Seriously, tear that s**t up! I wanna know what you think.
• Date: 07/15/2008
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Let's all drift off and play pretend,
If life is ment to be good then the sadness will come to an end.
Cotton candy clouds and lolipop flowers,
Are what people look for in lands of happy towers.
Glowstick parties replace tupperware parties,
Everyone has buckets of kandii and smarties.
Love laser shows and techno thumping,
Replace all the heartahce and dumping.
Nothing bad could ever occur,
When you live life by the words of p.l.u.r.

Comments

[Selenite Sugar]

Dude. Have you EVER been to a rave?
Obviously you don't know how hard it is to rhyme when you're juiced.

[Toastbusters]

Yo yo dawg! That s**t be abysmal!
Yo' rhyme scheme's wiggidy wack, and mad overplayed, yo.
I mean, s**t, your meter ain't even right, ********, girl, you need to take this s**t in the back alley, and curbstomp it with a second draft, and maybe some harsh editing, yo.
I suggest lettin' one of the peeps in your posse have a read, let them ******** do some peer editing.

[captain sexy12]

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