Every

• Artist: JeanMorgan
• Description: I wrote this after I broke up with my girlfriend of four years...
  Yeah.. it's sad... and angst-y.... but oh well
  I like how it turned out...
  By the way, all punctuation and spelling mistakes are stylistic and done on purpose.
• Date: 07/16/2008
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everywhere i went she was there
except today
every step i took
was one less to run away
every tear i cried
was to keep the pain at bay
every word i kept inside
so i'd know just what to say
Wasted.
Because everywhere I went, she was there
Except today.

Comments

[JeanMorgan]

All of my work has soul, thank you very much! And my grammar is always pristine! Stop being so petty because you didn't like what I had to say about your work. The 'add comment' button is there so we can critisize the work, so each writer can grow and learn. I typed comments about things I found that could be worked on. Normal people would say "Thank you for your critque" or "Hm... I don't quite agree with you, I like it like this".

[The_Huntsman_Of_Lore]

Sad.
I like your style. The lack of capitolization until the end gave it a nice... punch!

[Mrs_Black_Bear]

This one is the best one of your submitted poems, since it actually has soul and good spelling and grammar.