Day After Day

• Artist: iBanpaiai
• Description: I felt depressed, I didn't know where to go, I suppose writing helped a little.
• Date: 07/16/2008
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Day After Day you told me you care,
Day After Day you said you'd be there.
Day After Day you'd let me down,
Day After Day I'd leave with a frown.
You promised me you're love Day After Day,
But you forgot to mention that you're love was already taken away.

Comments

[ceresB]

Good!If you write it in detail mayb nicer but this is already good if you have no intention to become a poet.But its good,hope you'll feel better.

[Little Miss Rigor Mortis]

I'm glads you feel a little better. I'll add this is to my faves. good job! very pretty, and very true.

[OMGLAVASAUR]

this is a great poem *add to faves*

[Hane no Kori]

It's really good. There's just one error; "you're" means "you are". You need to use "your" for something that belongs to someone.

[OoOCrystalMoonOoO]

I think I knew someone who went through that...Great poem its almost in like a Diamante style...

[awesomegirl769]

awesome