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Day After Day you told me you care,
Day After Day you said you'd be there.
Day After Day you'd let me down,
Day After Day I'd leave with a frown.
You promised me you're love Day After Day,
But you forgot to mention that you're love was already taken away.
- Title: Day After Day
- Artist: iBanpaiai
- Description: I felt depressed, I didn't know where to go, I suppose writing helped a little.
- Date: 07/16/2008
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Comments (7 Comments)
- ceresB - 01/10/2009
- Good!If you write it in detail mayb nicer but this is already good if you have no intention to become a poet.But its good,hope you'll feel better.
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- Little Miss Rigor Mortis - 12/14/2008
- I'm glads you feel a little better. I'll add this is to my faves. good job! very pretty, and very true.
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- OMGLAVASAUR - 07/16/2008
- this is a great poem *add to faves*
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- Hane no Kori - 07/16/2008
- It's really good. There's just one error; "you're" means "you are". You need to use "your" for something that belongs to someone.
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- OoOCrystalMoonOoO - 07/16/2008
- I think I knew someone who went through that...Great poem its almost in like a Diamante style...
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- awesomegirl769 - 07/16/2008
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awesome
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