Identity

• Artist: Cheating Time
• Description: I'm a first timer, really looking for constructive criticism. So comment or pm me please.
• Date: 07/17/2008
• Tags: lies identity fake real true

Stop and look, look at your life.
Is it really how you want it to be like?
Are you on the road you want to be going?
Is this the person you want to be?

A girl with some fake friends,
Who treat her how she treats them,
Behind backs always gossiping
That’s all I see.

But now, you can turn it all around,
To this identity, you don’t have to be bound.
Sure it will be hard, and life can be tough,
But it won’t be made out of quite the same stuff.

Smiles and friends,
They don’t have to be fake.
Because believe me,
All that’s a mistake.

Just take my hand,
And I’ll take yours.
Together, we can do it.
I promise, we’ll get through it.

Comments

[Darkfox Soldier]

I like the way it is. If you want something constructive, try making your line of about equal lenght. It makes it easier for others to read.

[shyness-is-sad]

if your a frist timer its pretty good

[ArchangelTsuya]

Yay for unstructured rhyming biggrin