Lost

• Artist: AngelisXIII
• Description: Tell me what you think.
• Date: 07/18/2008
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Talking's just a waste of breath and living's just a waste of death,
Happiness will subside but frustration never dies.
I no longer even know, where exactly the two-sided road goes.
My days are filled with despair, since I can no longer breath the sweet air.
I wish you were still here, but you've left.
And everyone has gone deaf.
Chaos and hate congregate, and open the door to our unknown fate.
I know, you're scared to walk through that door.
But, I can't walk with you anymore.
Please forgive me.

Comments

[I Like to Eat Faces]

Its good, but I have to disagree with ninja-kyoko-chan. It would be better if either all lines rhymed, or none did. Sadly, it seems to be lacking a structure. The content is good, but it doesn't quite flow. All in all, it is a good poem.

[ninja-kyoko-chan]

I really like how the last line doesn't rhyme. It's like you're explaining something, and then you finally get to the point. Awesome use of metaphors, and the whole things al very overwhelming. Please continue writing, it's very enjoyable.

[sexylady900]

its ok son