Blood Rain

• Artist: supi_kun
• Description: This poem was done for a contest entry at school, but my teacher wouldn't let me submit it because she said that the poem is to... horrific. She also said that if she didn't know me, she would've sent me to the counseling office. oh noe~
  I wasn't aiming to be scary like that, but it just came out. Please comment?
• Date: 07/19/2008
• Tags: macabre horrow corpse rain dream

Pitter patter, pitter patter

Tumbling down my window pane
Slowly sliding down again

Pitter patter, pitter patter

Fish are sleeping, all in bed
Dancing lazily in my head

Pitter patter, pitter patter

Red as apples, dark as death.
Sliding down the horror sheath.

Pitter patter, pitter patter

Lifeless doll of human bones,
Can you hear the raining drones?

Pitter patter, pitter patter

Dripping slowly from the blade
Smiling crooked never fade

Pitter patter, pitter patter

Comments

[gloomycow]

this poem is absolutly BEAUTIFUL!!!!! i love it. i myself feel you are extremly talented!!! you should keep them all in a journal if no do not do so already never throw any of them away, i mean your great!!!

[mexicantacos2003]

well the teacher has a point.
she has a limited brain so that is the only point she can make
it is quite scary.
in a sense i guess thats a bad thing. (not really)
but on the other hand you've made a wonderful poem
(horrific?? no more like "deathly" wink
very good

ill give it a 4

[Ashyr Black]

that's really good

[supi_kun]

thanks all~ it's sylphia Plath inspired poem~
so yeah, stupid teacher~

[DeliFang]

This is sa-weet, and nice details. *thumbs up*

[moon-angel719]

i think it's really good

[Lilythesftbllwarrior]

stupid teacher. just cause its not happy and rainbows doesnt mean its not good poetry. shes afraid, i know it!