Release Me

• Artist: Batdude Slytongue
• Description: Its all I could come up with in 20 minutes.
• Date: 07/23/2008
• Tags: appease release dark sorrow melancholic

Appease my mind, my body shall follow,
In the darkness, we all tend to get hollow.
Show me my dreams, for I yearn to see,
how peaceful we could make this world to be.

Follow me across through my anger and pain,
I'm tired and hungry and want my soul back again.
Bring back to life that which I've forgotten,
or carry me whole to my deep grave unrotten.

Give me my life back, for I've come to claim,
that what was stolen and with you remains.
Appease my mind, my body shall follow.
In the darkness we all tend to get hollow.

Comments

[Batdude Slytongue]

Thanks for your comments all smile

[Cythera Mors]

It seems like one of those short notelets poets write, which go on to becoming famous lines that people remember through time for their lasting simplicity and cryptic presence.. Looking forward to more from you.. smile

[Atheshya]

This is definately original. I like it <3 The rhymes are very unforced, and this has some memorable lines. ('Appease my mind, my body shall follow.')... this definately derves four stars (a bit short to get five), and a favourite.

[Haru-chan101]

OMG i so love it....^_^.....its sad and stuff....and i like that

[Artimis Niadd]

Not bad, I am not exactly a poetry fan but it seemed good to me <333

[Trai Maru]

Eh its kinda cool ive seen worse and better... at least you tried.