Screaming on the Inside

• Artist: Akeioni
• Description: Just a poem I wrote. It may sound original, but in my opinion, it's one of my best.
  
  Feel free to comment whether it be good or bad.
  
  Thanks. ^_^
• Date: 07/26/2008
• Tags: screaming hurt inside

Cant you see me here?
I'm Screaming on the inside.
Don't you tell me how to breathe.

You think you know everything
Well I am screaming on the inside.
Tell me what This love was for.

Hypocrisy should be a rule
Against lunatics just like you.
Telling me that I cant do something,
Don't tell me I cant say the same to you.

We're Driving down a narrow lane
Like a manic on overdosed medications
I'm watching your fingers twitch
Don't tell me I'm forgetting dedication.

I watch you slit your dreams
Watch them pour out your heart to the floor.
Don't you tell me how to live my life
When you cant maintain yours.

Hearing your pathetic pleading voice
begging me to stay.
You left me first, In nothing but pools of pain
Don't tell me I cant run away.

Don't you see me here?
I'm screaming on the inside
Trapped in Misery
Cant you here my voice?

The moon is rising now
I'm screaming on the inside
Don't you tell me how to breathe.

Comments

[BOMBxCHELLE]

BEAUTIFUL!!!! i love your style of writing, it has very deep meaning.

[Haseo Hyuuga]

I really like it. Just like your other poem I commented on, this one gives me chills when I read it. Lots of explanation. In the next to last stanza, i noticed that you campitalized Misery though. It is for affect right. This may not explain what I mean very well but like, misery has grown, it isn't really a feeling anymore, but a place inside you. I hope I explained that right.

[CACTUS QUEEN 18]

10 I rate it, excellent, I like it.

[Sweetly Tragic]

I really like this.
I hope to see more from you. It's really good.

[Jean Claude passions27]

I like it. Your writingis good. I kinda felt like there is a connection through you in the poem.I loved it.