The Dance

• Artist: SoilderEclipse13
• Description: I wrote this in the middle of Science class last year and I thought it was pretty good. SO I shall post it .
• Date: 08/24/2008
• Tags: dance water

The Dance

Water dances in the storm like dancers on a stage
The movement of swirls and insane movements
hypnotize you. Not removing your eyes from the feirce sight
The small creatures you see move with the steady beat
of rain falling into the sea.

Comments

[Lord Ninja Flakes]

personally, i didn't really like the second line, but otherwise, its really good. good job =]

[iiLil_emo_PuppeTii]

i could rlly see it!! wow this is very good!

[CyKa]

Not trying to be snicky, but it's fierce ^^
Otherwise I like the rythm of it, it makes it easy to see someone dancing on stage