Wish

• Artist: DevilChild606
• Description: yes i know all my poems are short but they are explained very well
• Date: 10/01/2008
• Tags: wish

With this wish I do declare,
I want my life with no despair.
The way you walk as you talk to me,
fills my head with plans to flee.
The way you talk about your love,
makes me wish upon the stars above.
Take me with you as you leave tonight,
before I wonder with great fright.
I love you lots with lots of care,
but all I want is for you to know I'm there.

Comments

[laughington]

its good and like Anachronistic Vampire said, it has so much potential

[iBrightScales]

This poem is good, but it has so much more potential.
I suggest you try and rewrite it, and then post it again.
I would love to see a revision of it <3

[Tequila Lollipops]

Well, you can want that...you want to pull the person closer even though you want to push them away...I think it's a self-defense mechanism...
Good poem! I like it!

[Kikisha]

i dont know it kinda confused me. I felt as if you are trying to say that you want to get away from the person only to say that you want them to think of and notice you. Bit of conflicting thought there, eh?