When you're upset

• Artist: x_V-Ghost-V_x
• Description: hehehe, nothing but a cruel dose of truth...
  
  dedicated to everyone who reads this
• Date: 11/09/2008
• Tags: upset down depressed whenyoureupset hurt

When you're upset
you lie
you cry
and teardrops stain your face
and your clothing is soaked with those tears

When you're upset
you smile and nod
you sit and laugh
you deny the sadness you are
you lose sight of what you love

When you're upset
a black cloud hangs over your head
and tendrils of darkness emanate from you
and you push away the ones you love
and you give into violence

and you have thoughts of deception
of many conceptions
and love is no longer a reception
and you are struck with realization
that you want retribution

your mind's fingers tear into your soul
trying to grasp that which isnt there
looking for a heart that no longer resides
clutching empty space where love used to live
and where the darkest emotions hide

those emotions wear you away
and what used to be you
is twisted into a sick parody
and you have nothing to say
and you no longer display love or hate

you are hurt
you are sick
you are twisted
you are nothing
you are changed

A chill runs down your spine
a reminder of the past
before you loved
before you hated
before you were

A chill runs down your spine
a vision of the future
after you lie
after you cry
after you die

Tears no longer come
you are no longer hurt
you are no longer there
you are numb
you are down and out

When you're upset
you become numb
chills run down your spine
you can no longer cry
all you want to do is die...

Comments

[atsyrk]

i see that u were not trying to be rude, and now u say it, i see how it would change the meaning if u changed the language. Add me as a friend if u want

[atsyrk]

This is my best friend all over. For me it is too. This is terribly sad and true but a good poem. Like JakeTastic said, work on grammar but it otherwise rocks. Care to read mine? Pls comment if u do. 4.5/5

[Sexual Gloomy Bear]

i knoow a person like that...she lost her true self when she slid that cold razor across her arm for the first time. she lies and says shes fine, she acts like someone else. she dosent even know who she is anymore. she sits and cries every nigh. she findes something missing inside her.....could it be her heart?....is this person me?........yepp

[JakeTastic]

Good, you can really see everything you're describing. I would work on grammer and punctuation to make it look cleaner. You've got a bunch of talent, but if your work isn't visually attractive, not as many people would want to read it. 4/5 biggrin

(the poem is very truthful too)

[edwardcullenswan]

true words but only to some some people this holds no relavence to me it holds alot of emotion cause im not the happiest there is but neither am i the worst

[silverpeltwolf]

SAD!!! crying But well written! Very good and it is the truth.