I realized

• Artist: strawbiee
• Description: i wrote this from my heart.. i hope you like it <33
• Date: 11/17/2008
• Tags: realized

I realized when i left you
i broke your heart but still their are so many that are madly in love with you
it hurts me to know such things

I was always happy that i was a part of you heart, but knowing i might lose it to someone else hurts!

Should i smile cause we're friends or cry because that's all we'll ever be! </33?

I'm still confused how much i love you and how you love me
i'm not sure if oyu cried over me like I've cried over you
all i know it that " i will never find another you"

Comments

[strawbiee]

sorry i rushed through this

[kailan27]

Watch for typos. Not just the you, but you used 'their' when it should be 'there.' Additionally when you abbrieviate because to "cause" you need a ' in front (ie 'cause). Also, 3rd stanza (smile 'cause friends, etc.) is really cliché. I've definitely heard it before. I'm sure you have the capacity to be really original and write great poetry. Try to push the boundaries of language and talk about things in a way they've never been talked about before.

[SorrowfulxTears]

<3 It's very deep <3 5/5

[SakiniTanjoubi]

Tho the "you" is wrong its nice.