In the dark and big house

• Artist: rou0424
• Description: a poem that I wrote...
• Date: 11/23/2008
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In the dark and big house,
I am loney inside,
that no one talk to me.

I am cold inside,
that no one warm me up.

I am scared inside,
that no one stay with me.

I am crying inside,
that no one cheer me up.

In this dark and big house,
leave me with coldness and loneliness,
that no one know who am I.

Comments

[Klaora]

x.x Please, please, please, fix the grammatical errors. I could have enjoyed this a heck of a lot more. A little more imagination wouldn't hurt either. I'm rereading practically the same line over and over. It's good for instances when you want a certain line to be remembered, but don't abuse that power.

[filargente]

lol good job tamtam but u have some grammatic errors =3