Broken To Peices

• Artist: TikTokTikTok
• Description: This poem is about a girls first breakup and painful it is for her.
• Date: 12/21/2008
• Tags: broken peices

I sit with just me and myself, feeling alone.
He should of understood my excuse, instead of just ignoring me like I was an outsider.
I just wish I could have one more chance with him, instead of living my days, alone and helpless.
My life seems so insecure and boring.
He is such a jerk, just saying it's over with that painful tone in his words.
He gave up a wonderful girl, for that ugly, rude, blonde chic he always talks about.
I am trying to hold back my tears, but this poem keeps me going.
The tears are about to force through my closed eye lids as I type these crucial words.
The smell of the freshly baked peanutbutter cookies my father just made won't even cheer me up.
I just wish that one day he will turn away from his new victim, and turn to me instead.
I loved him so fiercefully! He just gave up on us like that!!
The tears just forced through, my head is laying on my hands, and I sob uncontrolabley as I write these intentional words that came from my broken heart.
I am now Broken In Peices.
Maybe one day, I will be in true love, with my next soulmate.

Comments

[Poetic Progression]

To the commenter below, poems don't necessarily have to have a rhyming scheme. That's what we call "free verse". Now, my comments. For one, you can spell "Pieces" right. Two, I thought the way you translated the situation was a bit weak. Especially that last line. That just doesn't make a good conclusion, sorry. I'll give it 3/5.

[SweetSunshineGoddess]

Hmmmm interesting. No real rhyme scheme. It seems more like a paragraph? Try some editing.