The link to silence

• Artist: Apocalyptic Beatdown
• Description: no words can describe this poem... :?
• Date: 12/26/2008
• Tags: link silence

Angelic in her essence
Devine and perpetual
she sprouts in my heart
like the leaves in
a vegetable.
But one sided love is like
having one testicle
I feel like half a man
when I'm not next to you...
If you will pity me
like Mr.T
I'll play the fool.
Having you next to me...
or in the same room...
It's something special
like a fire in a monsoon.
It's something rare
like a legless man running
though I feel it's not fair
cause you won't even say something.
I think we're linked by the heart, you know
that's why
I try to send messages directly to your soul.
So when you get this
send it back with a kiss.
That way I'll know I'm not alone
in this relationship.

Comments

[Lollipop Generation]

The dude below me has issues. The testicle thing was shocking, but it came through. 4/5

[7OuterElements]

Unique similes make for an interesting read. Some of them seem sort of juxtaposed with the seriousness of the topic (angelic presence =/= vegetables?), but I can't tell if it that was a matter of convenience or a deliberate oddity.

For the love of god, though, add some "yo" to those lonesome "u." Spelling out "'cause" couldn't hurt either.

You should put this up in the Poetry booth of the ACUMEN. They could probably tighten it up nicely.

[PinkFire07]

pretty good. i really understand what you mean.