field of dreams

• Artist: it is in the w a t e r
• Description: comment please ...i'm kinda depressed....
• Date: 01/14/2009
• Tags: field dreams

a field of dreams
crushed by lies
and cracked by broken promises
the darkness in her heart prevails
tonight she lays alone
wondering do you relly care
what i was not here
would you care if i died tonight
would you?
she is lost and alone
in a world she can never make her own
a field of dreams
broken by the lies
cracked by broken promises
alone she is the unknown
in a world that does not want her
A Lost Wonderland
A Field of Dreams.....

Comments

[YellowYoYo]

OK WE ******** GET I!T ITS A FIELD OF DREAMS! i think you should have kept field of dreams in the first stanza and the first stanza only, changing the title to something else, and leaving it at A Lost Wonderland. but otherwise it's pretty good.
5/5

[Spicesayy]

this is gewd

[dest77]

I think this was good!!!