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• Artist: A Stranger Raven
• Description: Feelings I happen upon in the dead of night.
• Date: 01/19/2009
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Vile Creature.
You use words like trust,
love.
Aweful Being.
You use your looks,
your smooth words.

Disaster Happening.
You say "I'll be there,
Promise."
Stupid Mistake.
I trusted you,
Mistake.

Comments

[Pretty Little Muffin]

I completely disagree with that other guy. I think that the fact you only used those to words (Vile Creature) adds effect. It's like there's hate and acid dripping off those two words. I love this poem. 5/5

[Xanopticon]

There's not much depth in this piece. Under Vile Creature, there's only two words. If you wanted the reader to feel as though the person were truly vile, you could've put more words.

I like the red text though. It draws attention. So 3/5.