nightmare

• Artist: iiBeKeirstin
• Description:
• Date: 01/23/2009
• Tags: apomeimadeatschoolihadabadday

At night i cry
in my eye
i fall to a lie
and i see u die
but u fly
to the sky
my little butterfly

Comments

[Overworkedandunderpaid]

Um... capitilization and don't use chat speak. It held no meaning for me. You'll soon learn that short lines in poetry can't get much of a message across. Oh! And work on your grammar, you know, the commas and full stops and such. 1/5.

[BASS HUNTA]

Short...sweet...simple.....direct

this is very vivid and yet so direct!
5/5