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look at you what do you see!
many thought of your own!
many words you do not share!
you cry as you hide your fears!
you have given up on life.
yet you live on!
but is all of this right!
your eyes field with emptiness!
your words with rage!
you hide behind that light!
someone calls you!
you do not here!
someone comforts you..
you cannot bear!
your lost in your past!
with your mother sick and death!
even your father!
mistreating you...
you do not trust!
you have had so many problems!
your even pore!
yet your mind is field with sadness!
you feel so unloved!
do you know that i love you!
do you know that theres good people out there!
even deep down your father loves you...
and all the people that hate you...
that does not matter!
your uneek in you own way!
all that matters is your here..
you have been through so much!
and i know its hared for you to bare1
one day out of this world!
only if you would believe!
all your dreams will come true!
you would have the only love that you will really need!
you also have me...
- by Princesses Allelujah |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 01/24/2009 |
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- Title: simiple life
- Artist: Princesses Allelujah
- Description: MY MOM IS THIS WAY AND THIS WAS SOMETHING I WROTE FOR HERE I JUST DECIDED TO POST IT BECAUSE I THOUGHT THAT THERE MIGHT BE MORE OUT THERE IF YOU KNOW OF ANY MORE PUT I IN THE COMMIT BOX SO I NOW THAT THIS POEM MEANS SOMETHING TO SOMEONE EVEN IF IT HAS SOME KIND OF EFFECT ON YOU REPLY IN COMMIT BOX ANY THING YOU WANT OR EVEN COMMIT ME..
- Date: 01/24/2009
- Tags: simiple life
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Comments (3 Comments)
- RandomRemark - 01/28/2009
- The mispelling of words was a huge distraction. And why are there exclamation marks at the end of every line? That is an irrelevant addition to this poem. There is also no rythm at all to it, and half the time, I had NO idea what you were talking about. Have a nice day.
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- Fo-eights Beach Fo-eights - 01/26/2009
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First in your description, comment box, not commit and it's affect, not effect.
Now for the poem
You do not hear, not here
And as dusk rose pointed out, it's poor not pore
Don't you know that there are good people, not theres
You're unique in your own way, not your uneek
And I know it's hard for you to bear, not what you wrote
That's it but I think the second last line would make more sense if it was
You will have the only love or you have the only love.
It depends what you want to say.
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- Dusk_roze - 01/24/2009
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"your even pore!"(Line 21)
*/* u mean poor RIGHT???? +.+
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