Evil Approach

• Artist: youkaigirl3
• Description: Why would I write a description to a poem? *sweat drop*
  Oh well, maybe I'll think of something later.
• Date: 01/28/2009
• Tags: evil approach

A crow's bite
Is a herons flight
And with that flight
Comes blackest night

Comments

[Wicked Crud]

I don't think the length of a poem makes automatically makes it good, nor does it make it any better. I think this poem is fine just the way it is. If it spells everything out and makes things too obvious, then there's not much for the reader to think about, is there?
This made me think a bit about the meaning behind it, at least until I read you comment. But even still, that's an interesting way to put things.
I like this a lot. Five stars.

[youkaigirl3]

i like critisim if its ment to help, i just dont like it if someone decides to put in a word like that, even if it is bleeped out. in any case, i wrote this a long time ago and it was something that just popped out in my head and i had to write it down quick before i forgot it. i thoght it was good short, since its conveying one message: when somthing bad attacks(crow)the good(heron)flee,startled.The "blackest night" is a period of bad times. thats it,and that is all.

[NakedJack]

Hey, that was funny. I wasn't saying anything bad about your poem. Not much to say about it really. Its 4 lines, not bad writing, but not good art. What is the point of the poem? Just asking to make you think, constructive criticism. The more you put in, the more you get out. So the more developed the idea behind your poem is, the better its going to be. You write well, so I think you need time to grow and encouragement, that's why I gave it a 5. Better comment?

[youkaigirl3]

whoever wrote that comment that I deleted,F-you. and u know why