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Every second of every minute
Every minute of every hour
Every hour of every day
Every day of every week
Every week of every month
Every month of every year
We are in search for the truth
The truth about joy
The truth about sorrow
The truth about ourselves
The truth about each other
The truth about light
The truth about dark
The truth about the waters
The truth about the lands
The truth about life
The truth about death
The truth about space
The truth about the Earth
The truth about everything around us
However, the more we look for the truth…
…the more lies we find within it.
- by Ninja Chaotix Dragon |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 02/11/2009 |
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- Title: The Truth
- Artist: Ninja Chaotix Dragon
- Description: This is just a poem I did in my Creative Writing class that I'm personally proud of.
- Date: 02/11/2009
- Tags: truth
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Gravetye - 02/15/2009
- Yeah, I think Markition was right--now that you've ordered it into a more logical list, it seems to flow better to me. Nice job!
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- Markition Necrovius - 02/15/2009
- The ending is done well. The only suggestion I have for you is to put the subjects of the "truth about..." lines in some kind of order. They seem sort of haphazard; maybe if you start with the most basic, like emotion, and work outward to things like space and earth, it would be more profound.
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- End8less - 02/15/2009
- I like it. It's redundant but that gives a specific charm to it. I personally think the last line it's really powerfull on it's own.
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- Gravetye - 02/13/2009
- I kinda like it. Kind of repetitive, but I'm guessing that's the point. 4/5
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