watching

• Artist: SnowLeopard1114
• Description: Its not thebest but i think its kinda good..so let me know what u think!
• Date: 03/07/2009
• Tags: watching blueeyes oblivious

He struts by,
obllivious to his surroundings,
oblivious to my eyes that seek him constantly,
then he looks at me ,
watching as i laugh for a moment,
our eyes meet as i notice him watching,
i try to depart my eyes from his,
even though i never want to look away from those,
beautiful works of art that he calls his,
blue eyes

Comments

[SmileZombiiie]

hey to the dude below me
just because you dont like it
doesnt mean you can be an @ss about it.
i think its ok but could use some work
keep at it though. ^.^

[Cloffing Pempslider]

Except for the awkward diction, lack of punctuation, cliches and lack of anything interesting or original in the poem, it's great.