Warm Friend

• Artist: Angelic-Disaster Dola
• Description: Hiyo!! Hope u like it!! ^___^ Plz rate! constructive criticism ONLY.
• Date: 03/16/2009
• Tags: warm friend friendship memories love

You'd be with me, thought it's raining hard.
You'd pick me up, when I"m broken shards.
You would make we laugh until my stomach hurt,
if I ever had a crush, you wouldn't flirt.
In my darkness, you were my light.
Thoguht it was scary, you made it warm and bright.
However, you've left this world; you are gone.
As for the darkness, there is none.
When you left, empty was I,
now that you were gone, I didn't even try.
To live and survive day by day,
what was the point, now that you were away?
But oh, I remember you, I still have sweet memories,
and I will treasure them now and forever.
I refuse to forget the sweet memories of we.
For those are most precious to me.

Comments

[Okami Kiba]

.... you focused too much on making it rhyme... put more focus on the emotion you want to convey. Poetry is meant to make something so vivid, so clear that the person reading it can feel it, even though they may not be going through it or have not experienced it themselves.

[Vampyer-Queen-of-Midnight]

this is amazing. i really like. but i do have a question. is it a song or poem. i'm just wondering cause it would be good either way.